It appears that I am going through a bit of an identity crisis when it comes to my first long draft. I tried to make the focus of my piece about my hatred towards bees. I focus on committing to that theme and reiterated it many times. However, my writing displays a secret language under its text. It appears that my real focus was not so much about hating bees, but about the passion of storytelling.
Like most families, storytelling is a huge part of mine. We love to have reunions just to relive the memories we all experience together (and of course catch up on any other stories worth sharing). It is an art in my family to know and have the talent of storytelling. In my opinion, not many people do it as well as my mom. I may be a little bias, but she's pretty good. I think my new focus will be to make the art of storytelling my new theme in this piece.
There are a few specifics I should work on as well. One for example are the types of bees I speak about. I can see how a reader may be confused because I talk about bees, yellow jackets, while also mentioning characteristics of hornet, wasps, etc. It may seem so microscopic, but I think this will be a way to pull my story tighter together, and clean it up. Another example is my explanation of the nest in the bush. Once I determine the types of bees/flying insects I am referring to, this will be a bit easier to fall into place.
Overall I am happy about my corrections and excited to edit this piece. Although, I will have to see what my other long draft has in store for me. If I am not as satisfied with the second draft, I am committed to editing this one.
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